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American Dad 1

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the hidden risks of abortion(final) by carol you

Abortion has always been a debatable issue in society nowadays as to whether it is a moral solution for unwanted pregnancy. Many people think it is ok to abort the child when the pregnancy comes unexpectedly, or simply for other reasons such as not being mature enough to have children, failing to support or care a child financially, or having a child may compromise their future lives etc. But regardless of these reasons, personally I consider abortion as very cruel and immoral no matter how good and reasonable the excuses might be.

Abortion is killing. What right do humans have to terminate an innocent life possibly resulting from their own stupidity in knowing little about contraception? Isn’t contradictious that society will not tolerate it if people go on street and stab each other to death and sadly they agree to restrain a child’s life forming in mothers’ wombs? Isn’t the same form of killing? If society supports legal punishments for street killing then I think they’d better adapt the same attitude for abortion. When women are pregnant, they have a living human inside; to kill a living human is murder. There is no other way of looking at it. How can anyone logically say, "you are not killing a human, just because that baby is not breathing in air yet?

Abortion is selfish. Clearly it has done a lot of damages to the unborn; they would never have the chance to live a life. Why would the innocent being punished for their parents’ mistakes? The loss is unimaginable; not only the loss of a life, but the life of a blameless soul that otherwise could have been filled with hopes, dreams, laughter, joy and love. A baby lost for nothing. There are thousands upon thousands of family's that would be more than happy to take those unfortunate babies in and give them the chance they deserve. The chance that God had gave the child. Why do these mothers think they can make a decision for these babies, just because they do not want to go through the process of pregnancy? Even if the mother doesn't have enough money to take care of the baby, there are many different government aids that will help these mothers along. For the worst reasons, if they really can’t afford a child at the time, they should really look into how to have a safe and responsible sex to prevent the unwanted result, and if something happens, like pregnancy, they should not then commit murder or "abortion" for further happiness, that is just evil.

Abortion is immoral. God puts a soul in embryos at conception, and a few weeks old fetus can be murdered like ordinary people. It's morally wrong or ambiguous because women are preventing the baby from becoming a conscious, unique person.Abortion plays havoc with the psychology and the future life of the entire family. The woman who has lost her child would possibly never be the same again. While the woman may be the hardest hit by an abortion, one also has to think about the mental and emotional state of the entire family. While physically only the woman undergoes an abortion, mentally and emotionally it is the entire family who loses a part of their mind and body forever. And the emotional devastation is unimaginable.

Many women suffer from Post Traumatic Stress Disorder related to abortions they have done. 20-40 even show a higher level of stress and avoidance in normal daily activities. In post-abortion trauma cases, many women have developed inabilities to recall the abortion experience or important parts of it; efforts to avoid activities or situations which may arouse recollections of the abortion; withdrawal from relationships, especially estrangement from those involved in the abortion decision; avoidance of children; efforts to avoid or deny thoughts or feelings about the abortion; restricted range of loving or tender feelings; a sense of a foreshortened future and suicidal attempts. Abortion is also significantly linked with increased abuse of alcohol, drug and in many cases, women have also developed with eating disorder. Furthermore, women who have one abortion are at increased risk of having additional abortions in the future.

Abortion affects women physically. Women who have abortion experiences more easily to develop breasts cancer, cervical cancer, placenta previa, complication in labour, having handicapped newborns in later life, ectopic pregnancy and other serious gynecological diseases.In conclusion, abortion is a very immoral, cruel and selfish action to take, the effects after is extremely destructive from both psychological and physical areas.

Niki's Fanfiction (Final Draft)

Mamma Mia - No More Lonely Nights

Background:
In the past, when Sam and Donna were together, Sam had to leave because he was engaged to another woman, Lorraine. Unknown to Donna, he only left to break with Lorraine and return, but Donna had already left with another man, after which Sam married Lorraine. He had two sons, but they divorced. He still loves Donna and releasises this strongly on his return to see Donna. Now Sam and Donna are finally together again.
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Sam sat next to Donna and grabbed her arm tenderly. She startled and raised her eyes to meet his gaze. She was very confused. She never thought that caring attitude could melt her so fast. In fact, it was that very spark that drew her attention in the first place.

“You have nothing to regret, my darling Donna. Now close your eyes”

His whispering voice on her ear made her nervous. She can't stop thinking but wonder, “was this gorgeous man really ready to give in and free to be taken?”

Donna was brought back to life with his gentle kiss, so soft and caressing. She felt something sliding into her mouth and he broke apart. She took it and opened her eyes.

She had between her fingers the most amazing diamond ring she's ever seen. My god, it was a diamond ring from him!

“This time I´m taking you with me. I won´t leave you alone never again”

She held her breath and the pressure of her fingers lightened, so it fell on her lap.

He smiled, and took her hand and picked up the ring, sliding the nightgown to expose her legs on the way.

“What do you say?”

Donna looked at him and found herself speechless. Sam was glad the look on her eyes was so different from 21 years ago. Now, he was free to make her happy, free to a well earned amend. It was priceless to see her eyes were pure reflection of him: wide happiness, pure love and growing desire. He slid the ring on her finger and kissed the back of her hand.

She pushed him back to the bed and crawl to straddle him. The soft curls falling at the sides of her head tickled his face. Walking her fingers through his chest, she said:

“After something like last night, you really need to ask?”

She kissed him and he turned to be on top of her. It was a battlefield of passion between their mouths. His hands were approaching her inner tight and lifting the dress. She pulled away giggling.

“Wait” she pleaded “Too many emotions to sink in so fast. I need to let it settle in. We´ll have a lifetime for this, and we have a lot to catch up with” He sat next to her.

She rested her head and her hand on his chest, in silence. Suddenly, she started to laugh. The fact she was pressing her face around his shirt softened the joyful sound of her laughter. It was clear and heart-felt. She was happy and complete.

“What´s so funny?” he asked, placing his fingers under her chin, to raise her head and met her gaze. Her frenzy quickly closed into a smile.

“It´s just… I can´t believe I´m 41, I love you and this happiness of being engaged to you. To get married soon, you better”

“Yes, it is surprising: we´re already 41”
She slapped him slightly and laughed again. Why was he so irresistible?

“And we can marry as soon as you want”

She smiled at the soft touch of his lips.

“You do want to stay here with me, right? I can´t leave all this, my… ”

“Our life is here, this is what I’ve been longing for”
She lied on the bed face down, with her head on her hands and moving her foot up and down.

“This is shocking” she asserted, staring at her hand “How did we get to this, after all this years? What secret magic brought you back to me?”

“I like to think it was meant to be” his face was leveled with hers, their noses tickling each other´s.

“I like that. How good would you say last night was?” she asked, trying to smile, and hoping he would find it good enough.

“11 level perfection” She opened her eyes wide and grinned.

“In a scale of 10?”

“Indeed”

“And what´s the extra point for?”

“Just because it was you and nobody else” She raised her head to meet his lips.

“You know, I think it was even better. And tell me, my dear husband, what´s next?”

“I think there´s something you said you want me to do, and you don´t need to beg” He pulled her into his arms kissing her neck but she ran away.

“Do you want to join me for a bath?”
Donna took her nightgown out and dropped it to him, waiting for her man to follow. No more lonely nights.

After all the years, she won her special golden prize. It was the final score. And the winner took it all.

Interpreter

A flash of light

Her heart stood still

The defining moment

That changed her life

Danger is lurking

She feels it's cold breath

Her cries for help

Swallowed by waves

He sits in the silence

Just watching her break

And above all lies

He now hears her call

The tortured soul

Now safe in his arm

Red thread legend

Ferbruary 29 was her 12th birthday, it was special because it only comes around every four years. Her father took a day off for her birthday, but instead of celebration her father had another fight with her mother like any other day.

She ran away from home, and met a boy Andy. Today is Andy's four year times birthday too. They talked to each other for a long time, and she suddenly felt that It was a miracle they both met each other today. After Andy was called by his mother and ran away, she was all alone agin, except a invisible red thread had link both of them, a red thread brought them together in the future

Doraemon - Fanfiction Final

One day, Nobita forgot to do his homework and got told off by his teacher as always and bullied by Takeshi and Suneo like always. Even his future wife, Shizuka, was disappointed of him. Well, Nobita didn’t care about what happened today because it was just like any other days.

After school, Nobita ran home and the first thing that he did was searching for "Doraemon". Doraemon was a cat – like robot at 21^st century who always stands by his side and helps him like a best friend.

“Doraemon! Where are you?” Nobita shouted out.

No one answered him.

“Doraemon?” Nobita wondered where he was, since he promised Nobita that he would show him a new future device today when he arrived home. Then Nobita went upstairs into his room.

“Here you are. How come you didn’t respond me when I called your name?” Nobita asked Doraemon who was leaning against the bookshelf, still without any reaction to his voice. Nobita tried to get his attention by kicking him and punching him. Then he realized that Doraemon was broken…

Nobita started to get anxious about the situation now, his best friend is broken? He couldn’t believe it. He needed to do something about it.

“I need to get help from the future.” Nobita thought to himself. So he jumped into he’s desk drawer which appears to be a time machine that lends to Doraemon’s sister, Dorami in the 21^st century. It was around night time when he arrived at Dorami’s place. He found out that Dorami and his grandson, Sawashi, was having dinner in the living room.

“Hey! It’s grandpa. ” said Sawashi cheerfully.

“Dorami! Something has happened to Doraemon.” Nobita said rapidly ignoring Sawashi’s greeting.

“What is wrong with my brother?” Dorami asked anxiously. Nobita told her what happened today at home when he got back from school. Sawashi and Dorami suddenly changed their attitudes and insisted of going to see Doraemon straight away.

Nobita took his grandson and Dorami back to his time-machine, on the way back to the present, everybody was quiet.

“I hope he’s alright.” Nobita said.

“He will be” Dorami and Sawashi replied at same time, but their face still filled with worries.

Dorami and Sawashi started working on Doraemon after they came to Nobita’s room when Doraemon just sit there and didn’t even move an inch. They examined his eyes and opened his back to check the power supplies and his chip. One hour passed by and Dorami and Sawashi stopped what they were doing and said sadly “Nobita ,we found out what the problem is but...we don't think we can fix it.”

“What??? You should know how to fix him… I mean…” Nobita’s tears dropped down slowly “He is Doraemon...I can't see him like this.”

“We are so sorry grandpa. I need to explain something to you, the thing I was worried about long time ago.” Sawashi said. “You see, Doraemon's ears were bitten off by a mouse, without his ears, Doraemon won’t have any backup batteries to power up” Sawashi stared at Dorami
while he was explaining.

“Yes. And of course, we can put new batteries on him, but the difficult part is, he will lose all his memories.

“His memories will be gone? None of them will be saved?”Nobita cried.

“Yes, and a robot model like Doraemon is too old...I don't think there is anyone who knows how to solve this problem.” Sawashi said.

With Doraemon’s help Nobita gained self-confidence and ideas of his own, but he relied on Doraemon too much, he will be broken eventually since he’s just a robot. “Look! I found a letter in Doraemon’s pocket” Dorami said.

“Give it to me”.Nobita grabs the letter from Dorami’s hand.

To my best friend Nobita:

I feel some parts of me are not right recently, please forgive me hiding it from you, so I decided to write you this letter.

Nobita it's been a long time when I first met you, we have been through a lot, we did many things together, I am really proud that you have improved since the first time I saw you, but it's not good enough, you have to learn to be more independent because someday maybe not too far away in the future, I might be broken and can't be fixed , but whatever happens to me, I hope you can keep up and be a successful man, maybe you will be the guy who can fix me and when I wake up you will be the first person I see. Please don't be too sad, I am happy that I can be your friend...I believe we will meet again in the future.

Doraemon

Nobita put the letter on his desk without saying anything. But something just changed in his mind and heart. He knows he’s going to be alone now, but that won’t stop him from accomplishing what Doraemon wants him to be.

It may be a normal day for anybody else, but this day has changed Nobita’s entire life.

Several years - The final Ver from Vicky

Category: Korean Entertainment· Characters：Hee chul , Han geng (SuperJunior)

Several years
1 She
Recently, she has seen that he was sitting there in silently for many times.
He was sitting there and overlooking a distant place, a bit grey and white hair was floating in the wind, his face is no longer young and handsome, but still with a warm smile crossed his lips.
She always felt, he face to the East, it seems like to miss someone.
At that time, he was a super star, in a foreign country with other 12 boys standing in the central of million people. But when she met him, he was just a dance teacher for a university, the only difference for him was bit handsome than other guys.

2 He
Thirty years passed, they already in their twilight years.
He loved sitting in the balcony, look at forwards, which can see almost half of the city, the place he lived for half century. There are continuously coastline at the end of the city，it seems like the fate lines in the palms of people`s hands, circuitous and winding.
A part of his life is lost on the other side of the coastline.

3 Those years
“Hey what are you looking at?”
He made two steps forward and comes up by my side, relying on the same posture and looked up.
Han geng looked back at hee chul with a warm smile and then answered
“Oh, just want to see the difference of the sky in here compare with my hometown.”
“So! Have you seen any difference?”
“No! They are same, same blue and white, nothing changed.”
He said with some loneliness.
“How come they are looking in different place with different people, why the sky is still reminding the same?”
Hee chul suddenly draped his arm round his shoulders and saying
“Are you fool? Of course it is different, am I in your hometown?!”

Cloth covering his body; suddenly he Wake up from his dream.
“Wow, it`s you.” That was his wife.

She looked carefully at the photo album that he holds in his hand, and then asked him with soft voice.
“Are you just thinking of you previous teammates in Korea?”
“Ah, yes, do not know how they are now.”
She seemed to fall into the memories.
“When we first married, they were come, I still remember there have one particular beautiful boy, he just look like a girl, so that made me thought he was your ex-girlfriend, ha-ha."
“What was his name…? His surname seems like Kim, and he called Hee...Hee Chul…Right? ”
Hee Chul, Hee Chul…

4 They
Some of the memories just like covered by dust, it growth quietly in the corner. When you turned it on at someday, the thick layer of dust would murky your eyes.
He wakes up from the dream.
The dream just like the spider web, to implicate him, he wants to pull it apart, but that made it more complexity.
Suddenly his heart beat become so fast, he touches the forehead, there are fully of cold sweat.
Thought the past, he could not stop the tear drops from the corner of his eyes.

5 Memories
He has never won him, and never followed up his thought.
But he knows, he will never argue with Kim hee chul, because whenever hee chul said is right.
So, when Hee chul said to him “Han Geng you have to be happy”, he is trying his hard to be happy.

The last time they met was on his wedding.
Even if the band has been dissolved, on the day of his marriage, the rest of 12 teammates have come.
He saw heel chul was standing in the corner of the room, he still beautiful, but the smile on his face was Pale.
He stood there, his thin body is seems to disappear.
He cried suddenly, and keeps repeating his name silently.
Hee chul walk to him and hold him tight, then Han geng felt he touch his head gently.
He could not say a word, but to hear hee chul said beside his ear
“Han Geng, you have to be happy, so I will never regret my decision.”

Their wedding was in church. At the time he and his bride exchange the ring, he look at hee chul. He was standing between his friends and relatives; he was looking at him as well and then laughed beautifully as he never did before, laugh with tears in his eyes.
He kiss his bride, and swear love her forever.

6 Recalling
Everything back to the starting point, back into the life they have met each other.
He was on this side, while him on other side.
He open the photo album again, his little grandchild walk to him.
“Grandpa Hug”
He smiled and softly holds his baby sit on his knee.
His little grandchild was looking at his photo album, then said
“Sister …beautiful sister….”
He went to see, but there were the photo for he and hee chul.


7 Recalling
Once a time, his younger daughter had just accidentally seen their photos, and ran to ask him “Dad, who is this beautiful sister?”
He was trimming the flower on the balcony; he heard this and look back to see.

The boy, who amazing the time, under the sunshine, hee chul `s smiling face in the photo was suddenly come through his body, and then bit of bit crushed.
Long time after, he smile, and said “no, he is not a sister; he was the best friend for dad, forever best friend …”


8 Finales
To the twilight years of life，we all want keep the time stay here forever.
But finally with a deep sign, why life can no just like the first time we met.

Even now, he still afraid to tell, that he loved him.

Remark:

The SuperJunior was composed by 13 boys (Leeteuk , Hee chul , Han geng , YeSung , Kangin , Shindong , Sungmin , EunHyuk , DongHae , SiWon , RyeoWook , KiBum , KyuHyun.)
They are one of the important Projects from SM entertainment. Their appearance made SM entertainment successfully entered the international market.
superjunior`s first official debut was on 6th November 2005, their captain is Leeteuk.
Their official website link: http://superjunior.smtown.com/

In the text, the two characters are two of team members from SuperJunior , Hee chul and Han geng.